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Little lonely Lolita lying by a lake
Life's too terrible, you just don't want to wake
You say no one around you understands your feelings
Well I've got news for you, Starshine,
                          you're not the only one kneeling

Burning crosses on a pyre of grass
Counting away the seconds in an hourglass
Hurts so much, but you're afraid to ask
You want to escape the nightmare, but dreams don't last

Mumblin' and screamin'
Don't know what you're speakin'
Frightening lightning
Can't you see the light?

Laughing, crying
All the dreams are dying
Can't you see the light
Or is there no soul in the night?


Little lonely Lolita lying by a lake
Is your life too real or is it too fake?
Are we all lost to your charade?
I can't seem to break free from your soulless gaze

Mumblin' and screamin'
Don't know what you're speakin'
Frightening lightning
Can't you see the light?

Laughing, crying
All the dreams are dying
Can't you see the light
Or is there no soul in the night?


Wake up!
There is no truth in darkness!
Wake up!
There is no joy in madness!

All your years are being spent
All your memories you try to forget
Can't you just open up your eyes

Wake up!
There is no counsel in the blind!
Wake up!
You can be no friend of mine
If you're resigned

Little lonely Lolita lying by a lake
Will you ever dream again?
©2009 =Vindicta38
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Author's Comments

Edit: July 27, 2009 5:05 a.m.

I saw a few things about this one that I didn't like, after I started putting a rhythm to it in my head. The way it is now, it flows a lot better as a song. :P And it's supposed to have a very upbeat tempo, if that helps you hear it yourself. :XD:




I hope it's good, I've been working on it for a while...

:icondonotuseplz::iconmyartplz:

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:iconvalentine-jade:
So freaking awesome

Best one so far

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I hear your voice so precious echoing deeply inside

~lyriclub
:iconvindicta38:
:w00t:

I'm glad you think so. :XD:

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Words do my bidding! ....... Sometimes...
:iconvalentine-jade:
Lol xD Its awesome dude.

Totally perfect for a song

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I hear your voice so precious echoing deeply inside

~lyriclub
:iconvindicta38:
:iconomfgplz: REALLY?! :XD:

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Words do my bidding! ....... Sometimes...
:iconfallen-mist-13:
Nice... I liked it!

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Really now? I thought that was just how you are...
:iconvindicta38:
Thanks! :D

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Words do my bidding! ....... Sometimes...
:iconvalentine-jade:
Yes xD

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I hear your voice so precious echoing deeply inside

~lyriclub
:iconcaroncecilia:
i love this!!! very very good!!!!

:)

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~Those talked over oft times make the best writers.
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Thank you very much! :D

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Words do my bidding! ....... Sometimes...
:iconcaroncecilia:
:heart:

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~Those talked over oft times make the best writers.
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yeah, I'm one of those "I really like this, good job!" critics. So sue me...
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I support: =DailyLitDeviations *100ThemesChallenge ~Prompt-A-Day ~CollabLit

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